Monday, July 16, 2012

BuccFest Week 2: WIP First Paragraph

Welcome Mateys!

We're in week two of the Buccaneer Blogfest hosted by Sharon Bayliss and Courtney Young. You can still join by going HERE.

Today we're posting the first paragraph of our Work-In-Progress and I cheated a bit. My first paragraph is only twenty-six words - two lines - and so I posted two paragraphs. Do you think anyone will notice?

Anyhoo, my WIP is called Givin' Up The Ghost, a YA Paranormal Mystery. It's the first book in the Indigo Eady Paranormal Mystery Series.


If you're interested in the origin of the phrase, here is a definition:

Give Up The Ghost from The Phrase Finder:

Meaning: To die, or in the case of inanimate objects, to cease working.

Origin: There are many uses of this phrase in the Bible, including this, from Miles Coverdale's Version, 1535, Acts 12:23:

"Immediatly the angell of the LORDE smote him, because he gaue not God the honoure: And he was eaten vp of wormes, and gaue vp the goost."


For a brief description of the series, watch my first attemp at a book trailer - it's only one-minute long:


Givin' Up The Ghost
First Two Paragraphs

“What the...” the guy sputtered. I lay sprawled across him, our eyes locked in stunned surprise, our bodies entwined in a tangle of arms and legs.

I chanced a worried glance back toward the alley I had barreled from, but the thing was gone. I sighed. Not a graceful escape, I’ll admit. But all things considered, this new situation I suddenly found myself in was a vast improvement.


Indigo Eady, my main character, will be here on Wednesday to be interviewed, so please come back. After the interview, she'll be anwering any questions you may have.


  1. Excellent hooker, really gotten me interested in the story. Now I'm curious to find out more.

  2. Yes. Excellent HOOKER.***smiles***


  3. Clare, thank you!

    Shelly, thanks:)

    Alex, kickers not hookers? LOL!

  4. I like it and wierd as it might sound, I love the font for the trailer!

  5. I like it when people start novels with dialogue. And you threw us right on into the action!

  6. Wonderful beginning. I think "What the...” would've been my first words too.

  7. I reckon I remember this from th' Query contest ;) Seems worded a bit differently, but I like it.

  8. Well done on your first trailer attempt! I think I said this before when you entered the query contest, but I enjoy the voice in Givn' Up The Ghost :-)

  9. I remember seeing this somewhere before . . . liked it then and like it now:~)

  10. Title sounds interesting. Nice. :)

  11. Hi Gwen, nice to meet you. Followed you via your comment on Alex's guest post on my blog.

    Your first 2 paragraphs sound interesting. I like paranormal stories.

  12. Bridget, I like the font, too, lol!

    Alleged, thanks. That's one of the things I've learned about writing.

    Aldrea, yeah. That's what I would've been saying, too!

    Scotzig, yes you would have seen this in the query contest. I cut some of it out, though, so it would flow better:)

    Thanks Rachel, I liked your trailer so much that I tried one!

    Jamie, you probably saw it at the query contest:)

    Marisa, it only took me two years to name it:)

    Rachna, thank you!

  13. I's so late in posting my comments but it's been a long week already and to top it off, my MacBook is in the shop. Anyway, loved your first paragraph and I'm heading over to read the interview. I think it's going to be great just by reading this paragraph!


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